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By KateC (Katec) on Monday, February 04, 2002 - 09:04 pm
At the picnic table outside Verna�s hamburger stand in Hilo it�s very clear that there will be no talking and the time and place for conversation are later and elsewhere and long unruly black hair is pulled back out of the way with a piece of green elastic while thighs have to be spread wide to make room for the massive belly to settle in between and trunk-like rosy brown calves are sturdily anchored by broad feet in black plastic zoris so full attention can be given to the hamburgers and potato chips and pizza with all the toppings and fried chicken and pie spread on the table within easy reach while one hand holds a fork and the other keeps a lighted cigarette ready for that steadying puff in between each bite and we eat slowly and smoke deliberately as we look at the chicken and choose ahead of time which golden greasy piece to take next and a warm wind from the volcano gusts over us gently with a hint of sulfur to remind us that Madame Pele is watching and we�d better remember to bring the offerings before it gets dark |
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By Eithne (Eithne) on Wednesday, February 13, 2002 - 11:16 am
I think it's totally amazing that we both wrote about Pele. I really get the image of the massive Hawaiians and their massive food and the massive volcano in the tropical evening. Sounds very pleasant actually. I didn't even notice that there was no punctuation. |
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By Sarah (Sarah) on Friday, February 15, 2002 - 02:25 pm
I really liked the cadence and movement of this piece. Very much like the feeling one gets from such an experience. The descriptions are great, and I can smell the food, and feel the food-focus. Really makes me want to be there, choosing my next bite, perhaps in a mild stupor... |
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By Katie (Katie) on Wednesday, February 20, 2002 - 10:52 am
Half of this piece is dedicated to the preparation just before eating, very meditative and thankful with reference to ritual. Nice integration of modern and traditional. You used so many different methods to continue the thought without puctuation and it flows very well. Soft. I wonder about your experience writing this piece. |
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By Elisabeth (Elisabeth)
on Sunday, February 24, 2002 - 12:24
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Like in a favorite piece of literature, the characters are vivid, as well as the light, whole scene sharing food. It's full of unusual and surprising images, and like a painting. Well done. |
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