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By Sarah (Sarah) on Tuesday, February 05, 2002 - 11:57 pm
The sheet said URGENT and stated it was the first of twenty pages but nothing else was coming from the fax except for some beeping squeaking which meant that the paper tray was empty but the phone began ringing and so I answered it and regretted it immediately since it was Paula from Spades who takes ages to place an order since she never makes a list and I almost hung up when I heard her but instead sat down with the wheezing gurgling fax machine complaining anxiously behind me and I noticed an e-mail from my boss with a red exclamation point and the words DEAL WITH THIS IMMEDIATELY and Paula began to go into a hacking coughing fit when my cell phone began ringing so I put the call from Paula on speaker while my free hand grabbed the cell headset and I was hoping the coughing fit Paula was having would go on a bit longer than usual when I turned on the cell and said hello and then I was wishing I had let the call go since it was Sally from the hospital who likes putting me on hold and that is exactly what she did right after she told me there was something wrong with my fax machine and so I got up and went to get that paper but the moment I got to the door was the moment Paula finally caught her breath and started speaking and I sprinted back to my desk to pick up the receiver and the moment I began speaking to her was the moment Sally got back on the line and so I was sitting there with a woman talking into each ear and the fax machine going berserk and threatening to break free of its cords so it could go get the damn paper its own self when a nasally voice came over the loudspeaker saying I had a customer waiting in the showroom and so I told Sally the fax was being fixed and hung up with her just in time for Paula to hang up on me and I was up and heading away from the fax machine and the computer screen which now read FATAL ERROR and on toward the showroom when I felt that particular wetness between my thighs which could only mean I�d finally gotten my period |
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By John (John) on Tuesday, February 12, 2002 - 11:02 pm
I envy your use of capitalization, it breaks things up. I'm in the zone of chaos which I'm sure you intended. Good stuff, really, since you actually managed a narrative...something I completely bailed on. Impressive. |
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By Eithne (Eithne) on Wednesday, February 13, 2002 - 10:51 am
Oh God Sarah, I can feel the headache and cramps that would, undoubtedly, go with this scene. I also was right there in the hectic chaos. I think you used the lack of punctuation very well to your advantage, it wouldn't be nearly as convincing written any other way. Great Job. |
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By KateC (Katec) on Thursday, February 14, 2002 - 10:15 am
I've had days at work like this. This was so familiar, and you captured that feeling exactly. Reading this reminded me of Tetris, that game where the bricks come flying down so fast you can hardly see them, let alone find a slot for them--or for any punctuation, for that matter. Great stuff. |
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By Anonymous on
Monday, February 18, 2002 - 08:27 pm
For some reason I'm unable to read this as a linear progression. All I can get out of it is that there's a lot of scattered irritating things about faxing with a period at the end. I don't know if this effect is a good or bad thing for the piece. |
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By Elisabeth (Elisabeth) on Saturday, February 23, 2002 - 11:39 pm
This is full of realism and humor, and it made me laugh out loud. A very hectic day at the office indeed! Great use of sound. The sounds become a tangible part of all that she is juggling, and all that is so annoying her in the process. Awesome! |
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